jumbo
+1y
not being a dick at all, it's a compelling story, (I hate assholes that get on this site as full blown members of the "grammar police") but i just think it would be a much better read if it was set in a format that was easier to read, with the correct punctuation and paragraphs. I'm really not being a dick, just offering up some constructive criticism. I read all the time, btw. Keep it up, i'd really like to find out what happens.